This poem is a Lai, an ancient French form. I’m sharing the pattern along with my first attempt at writing a Lai. Interesting use of rhyme in this little ditty.
Not So Happy Valentine
5 a — On Valentine’s Day
5 a — she ventured to say,
2 b — be mine.
5 a — His reply was nay
5 a — and she felt dismay.
2 b — Bad sign,
5 a — for Cupid’s display
5 a — to rudely convey
2 b — decline.
© Freeda Baker Nichols
I like that you are trying your hand at a form you haven’t written before. This one made me laugh! That’s a good thing 🙂
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lol. I just thought I’d be different with that one.
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I’ve never heard of this form, but it seems like a good writing exercise. And, yes, he was rude!
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lol I don’t know where those thoughts came from. I had valentine’s day on my mind and that’s what fit the form. 🙂
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Good structure.
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Thank you! And thanks for following my blog.
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